Monday, June 9, 2014


                  


                NANIS *-* THE SINGER POPSICLE 



Once upon a time a popsicle, sweet and talented called 
Nanis. When it was small, his parents narrated that in a 
opsicle´s life there are two options: 1. Wait that the destiny carry it to the big human´s mouth. 2. Melt in the loneliness.

 It grew up and understood that its destiny wasn´t that, it was for big proyects. A day it discovered that it had a big talent and was sing, everyday ir sang and sang, but the people said it that was impossible reach anyone with its talent. Altought  it had many downs, showed to people that it could.

A headhunter listened its voice and decided hire it for big performances in the world. They started making shows in Sidney, later in the camp nou stadium and the final its performace biggest in the berlin wall. Everyone listened Nanis, they cried and cried but its beautiful voice didn´t let that melt because it sang with its heart.


So, Nanis never believed that its father said, but it believe itself, it believed that the dreams aren´t things that can´t not do. 

3 comments:

  1. Hahaha awwn "Nanis" really I liked the name. *o*

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  2. Mistakes:

    - "in a opsicle´s life"
    - "proyects"
    - "and was sing"
    - "impossible reach"
    - "Altought"
    - "decided hire"
    - "camp nou "
    - "the final its performace biggest in the berlin wall"
    - "didn´t let that melt"
    - "believed that its father"
    - "things that can´t not do"


    Mr Camilo, I have to say that you have surprised me with your last oral and written presentations. The story is really good, kinda short but with a good content.

    Nanis is a brave popsicle and you proved that impossible things may happen if you do everything with your heart.

    1. Character = You didn't describe Nanis a lot.
    2. Challenge = Well explained.
    3. Motivation = I think this part was very important in your story, because Nanis needed a lot of motivaton to reach her goal.
    4. Setting = You could describe it more.
    5. Obstacles = Nanis had a lot of obstacles to become a recognized singer, very good!
    6. Climax = As your story is very short, you didn't take the reader to the climax because the situation was very simple.
    7. Ending = Great message, very positive.

    I hope you continue improving your level, very good Mr. Camilo!!!

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  3. in a popsicle's life
    projects
    that was sing

    Although
    performance

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